RobH_en_tn/lev/08/21.md

produced a sweet aroma

Yahweh being pleased with the sincere worshiper who offered the sacrifice is spoken of as if God were pleased with the aroma of the burning sacrifice. See how you translated a similar phrase in Leviticus 1:9. (See: rc://en/ta/man/translate/figs-metaphor)

an offering made by fire to Yahweh

This can be translated in active form. Alternate translation: "an offering he burned to Yahweh" (See: rc://en/ta/man/translate/figs-activepassive)