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This Psalm has been creatively changed vis a vie the Text.
There may be others.
The first section in the presents ULB Psa 109
The second is what edits, which I would hope would be adopted.
This was a massive shift in the current ULB. I hope the edits in the second part are adopted.
\s5
\c 109
\m
\d For the chief musician. A psalm of David.
\q
\v 1 God whom I praise, do not be silent,
\q
\v 2 For the wicked and deceitful attack me;
\q they speak lies against me.
\q
\v 3 They surround me and say hateful things,
\q and they attack me without cause.
\s5
\q
\v 4 In return for my love they accuse me,
\q but I pray for them.
\q
\v 5 They repay me evil for good,
\q and they hate my love.
\s5
\q
\v 6 Appoint a wicked man over such an enemy as these people;
\q appoint an accuser to stand at his right hand.
\q
\v 7 When he is judged, may he be found guilty;
\q may his prayer be considered sinful.
\s5
\q
\v 8 May his days be few;
\q may another take his office.
\q
\v 9 May his children be fatherless,
\q and may his wife be a widow.
\q
\v 10 May his children wander about and beg,
\q asking for handouts as they leave their ruined home.
\s5
\q
\v 11 May the creditor seize all he owns;
\q may strangers plunder the product of his labor.
\q
\v 12 May no one extend any kindness to him;
\q may no one have pity on his fatherless children.
\q
\v 13 May his descendants be cut off;
\q may their name be blotted out in the next generation.
\s5
\q
\v 14 May his ancestors' iniquity be mentioned to Yahweh;
\q and may the sin of his mother not be forgotten.
\q
\v 15 May their guilt always be before Yahweh;
\q may Yahweh cut off their memory from the earth.
\q
\v 16 May Yahweh do this because this man never bothered to show any covenant faithfulness,
\q but instead harassed the oppressed, the needy,
\q and the disheartened to death.
\s5
\q
\v 17 He loved cursing; may it come back upon him.
\q He hated blessing; may no blessing come to him.
\q
\v 18 He clothed himself with cursing as his garment,
\q and his curse came into his inner being like water,
\q like oil into his bones.
\s5
\q
\v 19 May his curses be to him like the clothes he wears to cover himself,
\q like the belt he always wears.
\q
\v 20 May this be the reward of my accusers from Yahweh,
\q of those who say evil things about me.
\s5
\q
\v 21 Yahweh my Lord, deal kindly with me for your name's sake.
\q Because your covenant faithfulness is good, save me.
\q
\v 22 For I am oppressed and needy,
\q and my heart is wounded within me.
\q
\v 23 I am fading away like the shadow of the evening;
\q I am shaken off like a locust.
\s5
\q
\v 24 My knees are weak from fasting;
\q I am turning to skin and bones.
\q
\v 25 I have become an object of scorn to my accusers;
\q when they see me, they shake their heads.
\s5
\q
\v 26 Help me, Yahweh my God;
\q save me by your covenant faithfulness.
\q
\v 27 May they know that this is your doing,
\q that you, Yahweh, have done this.
\s5
\q
\v 28 Though they curse me, please bless me;
\q when they attack, may they be put to shame,
\q but may your servant rejoice.
\q
\v 29 May my adversaries be clothed with shame;
\q may they wear their shame like a robe.
\s5
\q
\v 30 With my mouth I give great thanks to Yahweh;
\q I will praise him in the midst of a crowd.
\q
\v 31 For he will stand at the right hand of the one who is needy,
\q to save him from those who judge him.
Suggestion for Psalm 109:
\s5
\c 109
\m
\d For the chief musician. A psalm of David.
\q
\v 1 O God, whom I praise**,** do not be silent.
\q
\v 2 For those who are wicked and deceitful
\q say deceptive things against me.
\q
\v 3 They surround me and say hateful things,
\q and they attack me without cause.
\s5
\q
\v 4 In return for my love they accuse me,
\q but I pray for them.
\q
\v 5 They repay me evil for good,
\q and they hated my love.
\s5
\q
\v 6 Appoint a wicked man to testify against him;
\q and an accuser to stand at his right hand.
\q
\v 7 When he is judged, let him be found guilty;
\q may his prayer be regarded as sinful.
\s5
\q
\v 8 May his days be few;
\q may another take his office.
\q
\v 9 May his children be fatherless,
\q and his wife a widow!
\q
\v 10 May his children wander about and beg,
\q seeking food far from the ruins of the house they live in.
\s5
\q
\v 11 May the creditor seize all that he has!
\q May strangers plunder the fruits of his labor.
\q
\v 12 Let there be no one who would extend any kindness to him.
\q May no one have pity on his fatherless children**!**
\q
\v 13 May his descendants be cut off**!**
\q May his name be blotted out in the second generation.
\s5
\q
\v 14 May the iniquity of his ancestors be remembered to Yahweh**!**
\q May the sin of his mother never be blotted out!
\q
\v 15 Let them be before Yahweh continually,
\q that he may cut off the memory of them from the earth**!**
\q
\v 16 For that man did not remember to show kindness,
\q but he harassed the oppressed and needy,
\q and the brokenhearted, to put them to death.
\s5
\q
\v 17 That man loved cursing. May they come back upon him**!**
\q He found not delight in blessing, may it be far from him.
\q
\v 18 He clothed himself with cursing as his garment,
\q and may his curse soak into his body like water,
\q like oil into his bones**!**
\s5
\q
\v 19 May his curses be to him like the clothes he wears to cover himself,
\q like the belt he continually wears.
\q
\v 20 May this be the reward of my accusers from Yahweh,
\q of those who say evil things about me.
\s5
\q
\v 21 But you, Yahweh my Lord, deal kindly with me for your name's sake.
\q Because your steadfast love is good, save me**!**
\q
\v 22 For I am oppressed and needy,
\q and my heart is wounded within me.
\q
\v 23 Like a shadow that stretches out, I am fading away;
\q I am shaken off like a locust.
\s5
\q
\v 24 My knees are weak from fasting;
\q my body has become as skin and bones.
\q
\v 25 I have become an object of scorn to my accusers;
\q when they see me, they shake their heads with scorn.
\s5
\q
\v 26 Help me, Yahweh my God;
\q save me by your covenant faithfulness.
\q
\v 27 Let them know that this is your hand;
\q you, Yahweh, have done this!
\s5
\q
\v 28 Let them curse, but you will bless!
\q They arise and are put to shame,
\q but your servant will be glad.
\q
\v 29 May my accusers be clothed with dishonor;
\q may they be wrapped in their own shame as in a robe.
\s5
\q
\v 30 With my mouth I give great thanks to Yahweh**!**
\q I will praise him in the midst of a crowd**!**
\q
\v 31 For he stands at the right hand of the needy,
\q to save him from those who condemn his soul to death.
I added bold to help us see the suggested changes.
v 6 line 1: I added "to" before "testify".
v 18 line 2: i changed "loak" to "soak".
v 29 line 2: I add the word "be".
This window just shows what I think is adequate. See the next window for suggested changes.
1 "God whom I praise" vs "O God whom I praise"
ULB is adequate
2 "the wicked and deceitful" vs "those who are wicked and deceitful"
ULB is adequate
2 "attack me; they speak lies against me" vs "say deceptive things against me"
Heb: (The mouth of the wicked and the mouth of the deceitful) have opened against me; they have spoken against me with a lying tongue.
ULB is adequate
6 "Appoint a wicked man over such an enemy as these people" vs "Appoint a wicked man to testify against him"
Heb: 'set over him a wicked man'
ULB's "Appoint a wicked man over" is adequate.
ULB's "such an an enemy as these people" helps transition from plural enemies to a singular enemy.
It is adequate.
6 "appoint an accuser" vs "and an accuser"
ULB is adequate
7 "may he be" vs "let him be"
ULB is adequate
7 "may his prayer be considered sinful" vs "may his prayer be regarded as sinful."
ULB is adequate
9 "and may his wife be a widow" vs "and his wife a widow!"
ULB is adequate
11 "seize all he owns;" vs "seize all that he has!"
ULB is adequate
11 "the product of his labor" vs "the fruits of his labor."
ULB is adequate
12 " May no one extend any kindness to him;" vs Let there be no one who would extend any kindness to him.
ULB is adequate
13 "may their name be blotted out in the next generation" vs "May his name be blotted out in the second generation."
ULB is adequate
14 "his ancestors' iniquity" vs "the iniquity of his ancestors"
ULB is adequate
14 "and may the sin of his mother not be forgotten." vs "May the sin of his mother never be blotted out!
ULB is adequate
16 "never bothered to show any covenant faithfulness" with "did not remember to show kindness"
"never bothered" is adequate
17 "He loved cursing; may it come back upon him" vs "That man loved cursing. May they come back upon him!"
ULB is adequate
18 "and his curse came into his inner being" vs "and may his curse soak into his body"
Some versions have past tense, and some have "may" or "let".
Past tense is adequate
25 "they shake their heads." vs "they shake their heads with scorn."
ULB is literal and adequate
28 "when they attack, may they be put to shame," vs "They arise and are put to shame,
6 versions translate "arise" as "attack".
ULB is adequate
28 "but may your servant rejoice" vs "but your servant will be glad"
ULB is adequate
29 "May my adversaries be clothed with shame" vs "May my accusers be clothed with dishonor"
ULB is adequate
29 "may they wear their shame like a robe" vs "may they be wrapped in their own shame as in a robe"
ULB is adequate
31 "For he will stand at the right hand of the one who is needy" vs "For he stands at the right hand of the needy"
Most versions have present tense. Some have future.
ULB is adequate
This window shows only where I think changes may be needed. You can see the window above to see what I thought was adequate.
5 "and they hate my love" vs "and they hated my love."
Change to "and hatred for my love"
10 "asking for handouts as they leave their ruined home" vs "seeking food far from the ruins of the house they live in"
Change to "seeking food far from their ruined homes"
14 "be mentioned to Yahweh" vs "be remembered to Yahweh"
Change to "be remembered before Yahweh".
15 "May their guilt always be before Yahweh" vs "Let them be before Yahweh continually,"
Change to "May their sin always be before Yahweh"
15 "may Yahweh cut off" with "that he may cut off"
Change to "may he cut off"
16 "May Yahweh do this because this man" vs "For that man"
Change to the suggestion.
16 "never bothered to show any covenant faithfulness" with "did not remember to show kindness"
"never bothered" is adequate
Change to "kindness" only if we have limited "covenant faithfulness" to God's relationships with people.
16 "but instead harassed" vs "but he harassed"
Delete "instead
16 "the disheartened" vs "the brokenhearted"
Most versions have "brokenhearted.
Only 2 have disheartened or discouraged.
Change to "the brokenhearted"
17 "may no blessing come to him" vs "may it be far from him"
Change to suggestion
18 "and his curse came into his inner being" vs "and may his curse soak into his body"
Some versions have past tense, and some have "may" or "let".
Past tense is adequate
ISV - "inner being"
Other versions - body, inward parts, bowels, stomach.
Change to "and his curse came into his body"
24 "I am turning to skin and bones" vs "my body has become as skin and bones"
Change to suggestion
27 "May they know that this is your doing" vs "Let them know that this is your hand"
Make change because the next line is "that you, Yahweh, have done this."
28 "Though they curse me, please bless me" vs "Let them curse, but you will bless!"
Most make the second clause a statement of faith. Some make it a request.
ULB seems terribly weak. I'm not sure how to make the least changes and get it right.
Change to "They curse me, but you will bless me"
31 "to save him from those who judge him" vs "to save him from those who condemn his soul to death"
Most versions indicate that this is condemnation to death.
Change to "to save him from those who condemn him."
Agreed with most everything.
V. 15, I think it should be sins.
v.24 is lit. my flesh has become thing and without fat. I do not like changing it to a simile followed by an idiom (skin and bones)
V,28 the object is not supplied. suggest "They curse, but you bless."
Psa 109:24 One option is to delete "as" and just keep the idiom:
v 24 My knees are weak from fasting;
\q my body is (just) skin and bones.
Bible Hub tags the verb in the second clause as H3584 (to disappoint, deceive, fail, grow lean)
How about something like one of these?
v 24 My knees are weak from fasting;
\q my body fails from lack of fat.
v 24 My knees are weak from fasting;
\q my body is weak and has no fat.
v 24 My knees are weak from fasting;
\q my body has become thin and has no fat.
v 24 My knees are weak from fasting;
\q my body has no fat.
I think the most appropriate for the ULB would be:
My knees are weak from fasting;
my body has become thin and has no fat.
The ULB uses the phrase "covenant faithfulness" also in human relationships. (Gen 21:23 Abimelek to Abraham. 1Sa 20:14 David and Jonathan.) So I left "covenant faithfulness" in Psa 109:16.
I made the changes and updated the tNs.