Ch 4-6 edits/corrections

22-SNG.usfm

@@ -279,11 +279,11 @@
 
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 \q1
-\v 2 Your teeth are very white,
+\v 2 Your teeth are very white—
 \q2 as white as sheep whose wool people have just cut,
 \q1 as white as sheep that people have just washed in a stream.
 \q1 You have all of your teeth on both sides;
-\q2 none of them is missing.
+\q2 none of them are missing.
 
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@@ -331,7 +331,7 @@
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 \q1
 \v 10 My bride, your love for me is delightful!
-\q2 It more delightful than wine!
+\q2 It is more delightful than wine!
 \q1 The fragrance of your perfume
 \q2 is more pleasing than any spice!
 \q1
@@ -343,12 +343,12 @@
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 \q1
 \v 12 You who are most dear to me, you are like a garden that the owner keeps locked
-\q2 in order that other men cannot enter it;
+\q2 so that other men cannot enter it;
 \q1 you are like a spring that is covered
-\q2 in order that others may not drink from it.
+\q2 so that others may not drink from it.
 \q1
 \v 13 You are like an orchard of pomegranate trees
-\q2 full of delicious fruit,
+\q2 full of delicious fruit
 \q2 and plenty of plants that produce henna and nard spices,
 \q2
 \v 14 saffron and calamus and cinnamon
@@ -363,10 +363,10 @@
 \q2 that flows down from the mountains of Lebanon.
 \s2 The woman speaking to her lover
 \q1
-\v 16 I want the north wind and the south wind to come,
-\q2 and blow on my garden,
-\q1 in order that the fragrance of the spices will spread through the air.
-\q1 Similarly, I want the one who loves me to come and enjoy being close to me
+\v 16 I want the north wind and the south wind to come
+\q2 and blow on my garden
+\q1 so that the fragrance of the spices will spread through the air.
+\q1 Similarly, I want the one who loves me to come and enjoy being close to me,
 \q2 like someone comes into a garden and enjoys eating the fruit that grows there.
 
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@@ -453,7 +453,7 @@
 
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 \q1
-\v 12 His eyes as gentle as doves
+\v 12 His eyes are as gentle as doves
 \q2 along the streams;
 \q1 the white parts of his eyes are as white as milk,
 \q2 with what resembles jewels inlaid in them.
@@ -467,7 +467,7 @@
 
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 \q1
-\v 14 His arms are like gold rods that have rounded ends,
+\v 14 His arms are like gold rods that have rounded ends
 \q2 and that are decorated with precious stones.
 \q1 His body is like ivory
 \q2 that is decorated with sapphires.
@@ -498,9 +498,9 @@
 \s5
 \s2 The woman speaking to herself
 \q1
-\v 2 The one who loves me has come to me, I, who am like his garden,
+\v 2 The one who loves me has come to me—I, who am like his garden.
 \q2 He has come to enjoy my charms,
-\q1 to enjoy cuddling embracing me
+\q1 to enjoy cuddling and embracing me
 \q2 and kissing my lips, which are like lilies.
 \q1
 \v 3 I belong to the one who loves me, and the one who loves me belongs to me.
@@ -527,7 +527,7 @@
 \q2 like a flock of sheep whose wool has just been shorn
 \q1 and have come up from being washed in a stream.
 \q1 You have all of your teeth on both sides;
-\q2 none of them is missing.
+\q2 none of them are missing.
 \q1
 \v 7 Beneath your veil,
 \q2 your cheeks are like the halves of a pomegranate.
@@ -535,10 +535,10 @@
 \s5
 \s2 The woman's lover speaking to himself
 \q1
-\v 8 Even if a king had 60 queens and 80 concubines
+\v 8 Even if a king had sixty queens and eighty concubines
 \q2 and more young women than anyone can count,
 \q1
-\v 9 none of them would be like my dove, who is perfect,
+\v 9 none of them would be like my dove, who is perfect—
 \q2 you who are your mother's only daughter,
 \q2 whom your mother considers to be very precious.
 \q1 Other young women who see you say that you are fortunate,
@@ -566,7 +566,7 @@
 \s2 The woman's lover speaking to her
 \q1
 \v 13 You who are the perfect one,
-\q2 come back to us, in order that I may see you!
+\q2 come back to us so that I may see you!
 \s2 The woman speaking to her lover
 \q1 Why do you want to look at me, the one who is perfect,
 \q2 dancing between two rows of dancers?