en_tn_condensed/jer/51/24.md

in your sight I will pay

The abstract noun "sight" can be expressed with the verb "see." Alternate translation: "you will see it when I pay" (See: rc://en/ta/man/translate/figs-abstractnouns)

this is Yahweh's declaration

Yahweh speaks of himself by name to express the certainty of what he is declaring. See how you translated this in Jeremiah 1:8. Alternate translation: "this is what Yahweh has declared" or "this is what I, Yahweh, have declared" (See: rc://en/ta/man/translate/figs-123person)